Shoutout to the bus driver who fixed my villain dialogue

I was stuck on a scene where my antagonist just sounded whiny, not threatening. This old bus driver on the 42 route in Seattle overheard me muttering lines to myself at the back. He turned around and said 'Try whispering it slow, like you're telling a secret that'll hurt someone.' I did it and the whole monologue clicked. Has anyone else gotten good writing advice from a total stranger in an unexpected place?

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terry_carter159d agoMost Upvoted

Bro a park ranger fixed my plot twist with one sentence. Wild.

blairtaylor9d ago

Overshared it, didn't he?

thomasshah3d ago

Nah, overshared is the whole point of these things lol